So I made a song

[y0ung j33zy]

 



Just wanted to know what you guys think.Im open to constructive criticism, the quality isn't the best so bare with me please

Thanks for listening.

 

[thejrob]

listened to about 35 seconds, but it sounds like you wish you were in odd future.

 

[y0ung j33zy]

yea i understand, but the flow switches up in the 2nd and 3rd verse(so ur opinion might change

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[y0ung j33zy]

bump. need advice!

 

[futuristic]

Originally Posted by thejrob

listened to about 35 seconds, but it sounds like you wish you were in odd future.

Glad you said this, I was about to click that play button

 

[lil smitty]

The flow on the first verse was hard to listen to. It seems like once you get on a particular flow you don't change it up. Work on switching it up more mid verse, altering pitch/tone/inflections, things of that nature. Essentially you want to use your voice as an instrument and not just a lyrical delivery tool. Overall it's not really my style but that's what I noticed as I(admittedly) skimmed through.

 

[y0ung j33zy]

Originally Posted by lil smitty

The flow on the first verse was hard to listen to. It seems like once you get on a particular flow you don't change it up. Work on switching it up more mid verse, altering pitch/tone/inflections, things of that nature. Essentially you want to use your voice as an instrument and not just a lyrical delivery tool. Overall it's not really my style but that's what I noticed as I(admittedly) skimmed through.

Thank you i appreciate it, will keep that in mind