If your first time I would say it was good. I have watched TONS of comedy and I feel like I am really good at it....I love unexpected comedy but I felt like you did good. I like how you kept a serious face when you would talk about ur stories. First half of the skit was okay....didn't really laugh but it wasn't boring either. The second half you picked up when talking about living rent free....honestly the part that made me laugh was when you mentioned ur girl wanted to sleep at 6:30 and you just woke up at 4:30....that made me laugh b/c it caught me off guard.
I commend you for doing this....All my family and friends have told me that I need to do stand-up but my problem is I don't like routine....I am more of improv type where I say whatever comes to my mind but I usually find funny stuff to say.
Keep it up...I know how nerve racking it can be but eventually you just have to get on a roll.....good luck